i REALLY like your drawings of the fire coming into the house, i think there's a better way to arrange this scene, and integrate that idea (my last image is pretty weak on that front... i imagined red seeping in through the cracks like yours.
i'm thinking on this. i agree - it's not as grabbing as the other sections but then to some degree it does have to quietly set it up. having the red seeping into the house - if done right - is a great, creepy tip-off of what's to come.
i love the wheat as framing.
a third vs tie-in idea: when i wake up, 'smelling the burn' there could be some charred remains of this room/house around the bed. not much coz it would get to be too much but the bed is resting on undefined rubble and you see a burnt window frame & lamp shade or something. just an idea....
i'm thinking on this. i agree - it's not as grabbing as the other sections but then to some degree it does have to quietly set it up. having the red seeping into the house - if done right - is a great, creepy tip-off of what's to come.
ReplyDeletei love the wheat as framing.
a third vs tie-in idea: when i wake up, 'smelling the burn' there could be some charred remains of this room/house around the bed. not much coz it would get to be too much but the bed is resting on undefined rubble and you see a burnt window frame & lamp shade or something. just an idea....